五6班 马宇伦

Baiyun Mountain is the famous place in Guangzhou. People enjoy climbingit. I love Baiyun Mountain. Last winter holiday, my mother and I went to theBaiyun Mountain.

Inthe morning, we went there by bus, there were many people in the bus. We tookan hour to get there. First, we went to the Peach Blossom Stream. There arelots of peach trees there. They’re very beautiful. We took some photos there. Thenwe arrived at the mountain road. I saw plenty of insects in the trees. The antswent across the road one by one. We also saw some tiny spiders in the leaves.

Finally, we got to the top of the mountain.The view is so beautiful. I enjoyed it. The air was fresh. The wind blowsoftly. We had picnic on the rock. Everything was perfect. Do you like BaiyunMountain?

指导老师：肖艳燕 Winnie Xiao

点评：Excellent! At the beginning of straight to the subject, let peoplestick out a mile. The tense is correct.