沈杭   五（4）

Last year, Iwent to Beijing and visited a lot of interesting places. I thought the mostimpressive place was the Military Museum of the Chinese People’s Revolution. Ithought when the boys went into the museum, they would be very happy becausethey could see a lot of military equipment, but if the girls went into themuseum, maybe they would feel bored.

When I steppedinto the museum, first I saw a giant model warplanes exhibition. There werelots of different model warplanes. These warplanes were equipped with advancedequipment. They looked very cool.

Next I saw manylarge model tanks. They all had different uses. Some tanks could be used forboth close combat and outfighting. However, some can only be used for closecombat or outfighting. And there was a little radio next to these model tanks.It kept introducing the tank structures and how soldiers drove them.

Then I saw theancient weapons. I learned that there were 18 kinds of weapons in ancienttimes. Some of these ancient weapons were light but some were very heavy. Myfavorite weapon was spear because in my eyes it was very sharp so it can helpdefeat the enemies.

Finally I sawthe astronaut outfits. Astronauts should be equipped with warm shirts, flyingclothes, hats, survival suits at sea, fur socks, knitted gloves and so on. Allthese outfits were in good quality and they were very advanced.

All in all, thatwas my visit to the Military Museum of the Chinese People’s Revolution. Ireally had some fun there.

If there’s anotherchance, I’ll go to visit it again!

Teacher’sComments:

 Tony talks about his visit to the MilitaryMuseum of the Chinese People’s Revolution and all the paragraphs fit thesubject. He uses a diversity of words and expressions as well as conjunctionslike first, next, then, finally, or, and, but and so on. Generally speaking, it’sa good try to enjoy writing！指导老师：Helen刘丽群